Logical Inconsistencies

It's marketed for adults only but the writing is not up to the task. A bunch of murders happen in the very first scene as well as some very awkwardly worded sex, but none of it means anything. The protagonist spends the whole time the murders are happening talking about how they don't care about murders anymore. Samarah, the antagonist, is the most exhausting human I have ever read. All of the writing is clumsy. Deciphering the intent from what is written is the only real gameplay mechanic I experienced. The whole script needs to be put through grammarly, or better yet, have an editor go over it for "Logical Inconsistencies". This game is not for me. https://youtu.be/4V5_uWm6ptk

Plot – 6/10 Storytelling – 2/10 Characters – 5/10 Visuals – 4/10 Music – 7/10 Sound Design – 5/10 User Interface – 3/10 Miscellaneous – 2/10 Overall average – 4.25/10 I am also definitely not the target audience for this VN. Extended review here: https://steamcommunity.com/app/3078550/discussions/0/599638390296650692/

This game was made by someone I think I consider a friend, whatever that even means. So I don't exactly have the perspective of a normal customer. Yet its flaws are so obvious that despite my personal bias towards it, if the normal customer were to ask if this game is currently worth buying with your real human money, I would say: No. While in the process of reading this visual novel, I wrote the following: "Every time I see another miscarriage of a sentence I think "But I've already screenshot-ed like twenty", and every time the sentence is just so unbelievably bad I have to comment on it. Cam despite appreciating the fact you made this and not wanting to hurt you or anything, I can't sugarcoat it in any way; the prose is bad. It's not just every once in a while and it's not just a little bad. It is god-awful constantly. The grammatical errors, omissions, typos, spelling errors... They never end and they don't get better. And even without all the just plain wrong stuff, the pros...